interesting...
an interesting piece for sure. I like the beat in the background. I don't know how I feel about it as a whole. But it definitely is somewhat unique and I'm sure was fun to make.
In response to your comment, "Maybe the last one I make. I don't believe that music is what I'm cut out for...". Shut the hell up man. Don't let anything discourage you from creating music. I mean this in a good way, I swear. As a musician and songwriter myself, I would never try and discourage anyone from stopping music. If you like it, do it. If you aren't happy with your work, all that means is that you should practice/work on it a little more. No one starts out awesome.
It's up to you, but I'd personally hate to see someone stop making music. Regardless of how it sounds. It's such a wonderful thing!
4/5 :)